Matthew Ross
Age: 255 (23)
Height: Taller, 5’10”- 6’
Skin tone: Very pale
Hair: Dark Brown
Eyes: Deep red
Face: Harder, but still handsome
Body type: Thinner, but more defined muscles than Damien.
Significant qualities: Vampire
Characteristics/History: when he was younger he was very introverted. After he was changed he became very extroverted. Since he was born it was obvious that he was different. He was often found talking to himself or would lose his temper with people for no reason. He was often cruel to the other children when they tried to get close to him. His parents became very frustrated with him and became very strict towards him. The only who seemed to accept him was his brother Damien. Matthew’s metal illness became more prominent after he was changed, but yet he seemed to be more aware of his actions.
I can't quite decide what i want him to do to cause conflict in the story. I don't want it to be anything too extreme (Like lets blow up the earth type thing), but yet i can't think of anything that big enough. I don't want my story to be strict, ';good vs. evil'; any ideas would be greatly appreciated.
Here are my protagonists if that helps. They do not become lovers, just good friends.
Evelyn Shay
Age: 18
Height: Short, 5’2”-5’4”
Skin tone: pale, but healthy
Hair: shoulder length, layered, black
Eyes: Ice blue
Face: oval, classic beauty
Body type: medium build, not fat, not skinny either. Curvy.
Significant qualities: Witch
Characteristics/History: Very introverted. She is very hard on the outside and has trust issues because of the loss of her mother when she was 14. When her mother died she was left alone to fend for herself. Before her mother died, she taught her everything that she knew about witch craft. After her mother died, she studied almost constantly, and is now one of the most powerful witches of her time. She doesn't use the magic as much as should could though, only in extreme circumstances. She feels as though using it in everyday life for everything would be kind of like cheating. She does still practice her magic, but doesn't use it to do everyday tasks.
Damien Ross
Age: 251 (19)
Height: Average, 5’7”-5’9”
Skin tone: Very pale.
Hair: Dark, sandy blond, Short modern
Eyes: Deep red,
Face: Sophisticated, slightly angular
Body type: Medium build, muscular, but not overly so.
Significant qualities: Vampire
Characteristics/History: Extroverted. He has a strong sense of responsibility for his brother. Playful. He enjoys his life, and treats being a vampire as a gift rather than a curse. He feeds on humans, but refuses to kill anyone. He was born in 1758 to a poor farming family in America. He was basically the only one in his family who accepted his brother for his mental disabilities. He was changed by his brother when he was 19 in 1777. After living over 200 years he has developed a keen sense of reading people. (not mind reading) He meets Evelyn when she is being attacked by his brother Matthew. Because his brother made him, he is able to sense when he is near.
PS: please don't tell me the vampire thing is over done, i have heard it all already and i don't care. Also don't tell me my characters are like Twilight, because i have read the books and i know that they are not.
Thanks for any help!Help!?!?!?!?!?!?!??!?!?!??!?!?
Do whatever the hell you want. It's YOUR book, not mine, so when the hell should I give you my ideas when you should be coming up with your own?Help!?!?!?!?!?!?!??!?!?!??!?!?
What does your antagonist want? What is he trying to accomplish?
Your antagonist must feel incomplete in some way. So, what's incomplete? How might he try to fill that hole?
What does he want to build? ...get? ...destroy? ...stop?
y dont u just rp th charaters out
First, I think ';Matthew'; should have a different name, it just doesn't work to give the vampire such a high school kid kind of name, he needs to be cool and dark like damien except times 10.
Conflict: Damien falls in love with Evelyn (I think this is your story?) ';Matthew'; (who has a new name by now) knows that Evelyn is actually an extremely evil and viscious witch and tries to save his helplessly innocent kid brother from Evelyn.
Wow this can be good.
Just think about it, these two are always fighting and trying to kill each other in the background but whenever Damien comes around, they act all nice.
Then of course, there would have to be some other trouble that comes along and Evelyn and ';Matthew'; team up to save Damien.
In this process, they fall in love and now Damien transforms and becomes the angry one.
Wow, this can go on forever!
The Giant List of Plots
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If you would like more information on plot development check out:
How to write a story in 10 easy steps!
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Good luck with your endeavors!
Your antagonist is weak. Having someone be bad because of mental illness is not good. Villains are characters too and you need to spend time with them and get to know what drives them. People don't do gad things because they want to, its fun, or they are crazy. They do these things for a reason and they should learn from their evil ways.
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