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Is it good to use hair iron for my rebellious hair?


Some women think that their hair is disgusting, even if it is straight, wavy or curly. Usually, the one who has straight hair is wishing to have waves, and vice versa. Fortunately we can combat with it in different ways, but not all of them are a good idea.


Hair iron is a great possibility of control your crazy curly hair when you are in a hurry. We all love this fashionable straight hair and this is a fantastic idea to look different whenever you have a party, or even if you have to work or go to school. It鈥檚 very handy and easy to use; you鈥檒l have your hair able to go out in a few minutes.


Despite these advantages, there are many things that we must know about this appliance. First of all, if we use the hair iron every day it鈥檒l cause your hair go weak. It鈥檚 very common to become a slave of this machine, and it doesn鈥檛 stay too much if we don鈥檛 use a hairspray. You may see a transformation in your pressed hair seeing it dry, with hair loss, and so on.


Personally speaking, I use it but not every day so people can see a change in me whenever I have it straight and it looks healthy.


In conclusion, although hair iron has some advantages, I strongly believe that there are more disadvantages and that we must think in a better way about our own hair and take benefit of it that surely it has.








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Is it good to use a hair iron for my rebellious hair?


Some women dislike their hair, whether it is straight, wavy or curly. Usually, the one who has straight hair would love to have waves and vice versa. Fortunately we can combat with it in different ways; but not all of them are a good idea.


A hair iron is a great way to control your crazy, curly hair when you are in a hurry. We all love this fashionable straight hair and this is a fantastic idea to look different whenever you have a party, or even if you have to work or go to school. It鈥檚 very handy and easy to use; you鈥檒l have your hair done and be ready to go out in just a few minutes.


Despite these advantages, there are many things that we should know about this appliance. First of all, if you use the hair iron every day it can cause your hair to go weak. It鈥檚 very common to become a slave to this machine, and it doesn鈥檛 always stay perfect.


Personally speaking, I do use it, but not every day so people can see a change in me whenever I have my hair straight.


In conclusion, although a hair iron has some advantages, I strongly believe that there are more disadvantages and and we need to think more carefully about how we treat our hair.What do you think about my hair article?
Is it good to use (a) hair iron for my rebellious hair?


Some women (may) dislike their hair, whether if its straight, wavy or curly. Usually, the one who has straight hair is wishing to have waves, and vice versa. Fortunately we can combat (these unfortunes) in different (manners), (this can be by using different hair tools or products, however there are consequences if these are constantly used).


Hair iron is a great possibility (to) control your crazy curly hair when you are in a hurry. We all love (the) fashionable straight hair and this is a fantastic idea to look different whenever you have a party, or even if you have to (go either work or school). It鈥檚 very handy and easy to use; you鈥檒l have your hair (looking beautiful without being time consuming).


Despite these advantages, there are many things that we must know about this appliance. First of all, if we use the hair iron every day it鈥檒l cause your hair (to become) weak. It鈥檚 very common to become a slave of this machine, and (the results will not stay for long unless hairspray is used). You may see a transformation in your pressed hair seeing it dry, (dull as well as noticable hair loss).


Personally speaking, I (do) use it, (however) not every day. (By only using this tool every now and then, i have a range of different hair styles as well as a healthy hair)


In conclusion, although hair irons (have) some advantages, I strongly believe that there are more disadvantages and (therefore we must resort to different options to mantain our hair in a good and healthy condition.)








Your essay and English was very good, but i added a few changes :) x Hope i was able to help x